"Another thing that hurt the story was the occasional use of run-on sentences meant, I suppose, to convey the hurriedness of the speaker but instead were long winded interruptions to the flow of the story."
"However, denying an individual a firearm because of simple hurriedness/unkemptness fits (1) and (2) because the customer may return at a later time with a different mindset/wardrobe."
"Another thing that hurt the story was the occasional use of run-on sentences meant, I suppose, to convey the hurriedness of the speaker but instead were longwinded interruptions to the flow of the story."